今天的文章内容确实是很多留学生最大的问题,没有一个:逻辑。是的,你没看错,别惊讶。人们的作文分数不高,很多时候不是因为语言问题。为了消除细节表达的缺失,更让教授烦恼的是内容不合理,逻辑混乱。有什么问题吗?中国学生作文逻辑存在三个突出问题:无逻辑、逻辑错误、逻辑抽象。我们怎样才能解决这个问题?让我们和小编一起看看细节吧!

1.Essay写作没有逻辑

作文最典型的不合逻辑的特点是前后写了很多东西,但事实上,它反复地围绕着一件事,也就是说,说相反的话,说同样的话。既然是论证发展,就应该写“发展”,而不是同意取代。

2.Essay写作逻辑错误

这个更好理解,就是前后文无关,甚至相互冲突,比如下面的句子片段:

Online shopping is convenient,so consumers waste more time selecting from a wide range of goods.

前文说网购方便,是积极描述,后面却说浪费了时间。(自行脑补黑人问号脸)

Medical service is unaffordable to somepeople,due to their indifference to regular exercise.

这里的医疗贵和后面的不运动,也是牛头不对马嘴。都是跟健康大话题相关,但是实际上却没有逻辑联系。

3.Essay写作逻辑抽象

这类问题比较隐蔽,因为表面上来看,不算写错了,但是确实没有构成足够有说服力的展开内容,最后出现烂尾。比如:

Wild animals should be protected,since they are important.

很多东西都重要,我也很重要,为啥不保护我呢?(可能我跟熊猫还是有差距——体重的差距)。

所以,important这个描述太概括和抽象,无法支撑起一个合理的论点。

People in senior management positions should get higher salaries because they contribute more to the company.

同理,他们怎么就贡献更多了呢?赶紧说清楚呀。

以上问题对应的破解方法:

Essay写作没有逻辑:避免过度重复关键词

同学们要多多重复关键词,体现内容的切题性。但是,从论证展开的角度,除了重复之外,更多应该是相关,但是不完全一样。

可能更加细致一些,或者是对于关键词的一些阐释,而不是一模一样的复制粘贴。

Essay写作逻辑错误:注意褒贬和相关性

如果是完全冲突的逻辑,则把前后的褒贬统一一下,不要用褒义的内容去支持消极的论点,反之亦然。

Online shopping is convenient,so consumers waste more time selecting from a wide range of goods.

可以改成:

Online shopping is convenient,but consumers waste more time selecting from a wide range of goods.

Online shopping is convenient,so consumers save more time selecting from a wide range of goods.

Online shopping provides consumers with too much information and too many choices,so consumers waste more time selecting from a wide range of goods.

如果前后完全不相关,就增加相关性,找到真正同属性的内容去分析和论证。

Medical service is unaffordable to some people,due to their indifference to regular exercise.

改成:

Medical service is unaffordable to some people,due to the wide use of modern technology in medical treatment which is responsible for a soaring cost of diagnosis and surgery….

The health of the general public is decreasing,due to people’s indifference to regular exercise….

Essay写作逻辑抽象:增加细节

这种比较好解决(吧…),就是多问自己几个wh-问题,比如why?what?how?之类的,把具体的细节都加进去。说正式一点,就是解释说明、举例论证、对比论证。

一定要把这些过于抽象的词汇,解释到连幼稚园的小孩子都听得懂的地步,那就真的讲得足够清楚了。

Wild animals should be protected,since they are important.

可添加细节包括但不仅限于:

they contribute to the sustainability of the ecosystem/the balance of the food chain/they are on the verge of extinction/some of them have scientific value

People in senior management positions should get higher salaries because they contribute more to the company.

可添加细节包括但不仅限于:

they make strategic decisions for the company/they manage more employees/they need to maintain the productivity of all staff/they need to deal with more complex tasks/they are responsible for the current revenue and future development of the company/they are irreplaceable/they have more experience and can create more profit for the company

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